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Review of ‘the amazing adventure of Mark and Liz’ While reading the story, the only thing that appeared in my mind was ‘what a masterpiece it will be’. The adventure story takes you actually on a trip. The story begins with Liz and Mark. Both of them have blue sparkly eyes and share a journey on a boat. The writer has paid attention to every aspect of ruling a country efficiently. I am amazed to see how the writer has written every character in depth. I didn’t feel any barrier to imagining them. Indeed, while reading the story, I felt myself lost several times. No doubt, the writer has described everything beautifully. The selection of words is perfect. The story showcases the imaginary thoughts of the writer. Writing your thoughts with such detail is nothing less than magic. It takes a lot of effort. Not everyone can remember and write the emotions with such authenticity. What I liked about the story is ‘the sentimental dialogues’. The character formation of each character is just perfect. I love the way his characters are expressive in their performance. Their little fights are making it more interesting. Besides, there is no explicit scene or anything to offend which is admirable. To understand the whole script, you need to read the whole story. While I was reading that story, I found a lot of things to count on. The emotions and thoughts of the writer regarding the events were written nicely. Indeed, the way of writing was more attractive than the actual story. The writer has included even the most tiny details. It makes your writings distinct from others. From the Author’s perspective FIRST IMPRESSION - What was my overall take on the chapter after reading it? Answer-At first the chapter couldn’t captivate me. It felt like some imaginary thoughts written in the shape of a novel. However, it came out more interesting than I expected. Until reaching the middle part, it filled me with curiosity. It has made me surprised. The writer has done a remarkable job. PACE AND FLOW - Was it too fast/slow? Does it move smoothly, or is it rough and choppy? Did I feel lost at all? Answer-. Until reaching the middle, I feel myself lost while reading. After finishing it, I was deeply in love with it. It got choppy a bit at some points. PLOT/CONSISTENCY - Was the plot on point? Do I like where it is going? Answer- Oh yes! Adoring the chapter in simple words would be hard. I love it from the core of my heart. Indeed, the interest level is increasing with every chapter.

The amazing adventures of the dreamer Dear Author! Thank you for the amazing story. Here comes another part of the adventure tale. He begins with a scene where Robert is sleeping mumbling some words. His sister gets anxious and tries to wake him up but instead, he wants her to write the amazing journey that he was enjoying that moment. The dream is all about a trip where eventually he is going to find a treasure. Well, I liked the way the author included everything about the scenery in the story. However, I do feel that the document needs some editing. I noticed some repeated sentences and words. The repeated phrases can hurt the uniqueness of the story. It would be so great if you replaced them with some more attention-grabbing words. It will bring uniqueness and beautify the story more. The plot is perfect. I didn’t see any flaw in it. I liked the way you wrote down the whole story. It felt like even the author was enjoying while writing that dream. I guess, it is because the author is pretty passionate about it. What I didn’t like was the ending. I would have adored it you could have written in another way or maybe it’s the wording that is not making the ending attractive. Other than that, it is perfect. I can see the author’s passion for writing through writing style. Until reaching, the writing has become much more improved and it gets more interesting. I loved the way how his characters are performing expressively. They are not losing any thread. Getting out of the character by splashing some random dialogues can make it worse than your imagination. Whether it is the character Alfred or Robert, both have looked adorable. Besides that, their chemistry is also beyond appreciation. It might be difficult for them to even survive without unity. I liked the whole dream like I was traveling with them. The moment when they found their treasure, you woke my inner child who always wanted to steal some treasure. So, I guess, it was my favorite part. From Author’s perspective FIRST IMPRESSION - What was my overall take on the chapter after reading it? I loved it. This is all I have to say for now. Other than fewer mistakes, the plot was perfect. It just slightly touch-up, editing and it is ready to be published. The readers are going to love this adventure dream for sure. PACE AND FLOW - Was it too fast/slow? Does it move smoothly, or is it rough and choppy? Did I feel lost at all? It moved perfectly. It might feel rough at first but later on, it just gets better and more comprehensive than the beginning. Yeah, I found myself almost lost while reading the part where they found a treasure. SENSITIVITY - Is there anything that offended you in any way? Nope, it didn’t include any offensive stuff. I admire the writing as without any kind of romance, it maintained the interest of the reader. I didn’t find myself getting bored even for a single moment. So, yeah it was good to go. DIALOGUE WRITING - Do you enjoy the narration of the author? Was the message delivered in a clear and thoughtful manner? Yes, I loved the way how described everything in a right amount of balance between dialogues and scenery. PLOT/CONSISTENCY - Was the plot on point? Do I like where it is going? ‘Perfect’. It was just incredible. I absolutely loved it; this was your story's best part. The plot kept me engaged while reading and literally, it somehow blurred the flaws or mistakes. GRAMMAR/SYNTAX - Does the wording confuse me? Does the writing excite me, even though it doesn't entirely make sense at times? No, it didn’t confuse me however; I did notice some possible error corrections. Once, they get fixed, it is ready to be published in my opinion.

The Amazing Flying belt. Finally I get to read another part of your adventures tales. It was much better than the last time. One thing that I have noticed is the perfect character formation. I guess every character is just in a race of winning the award of best character ever. Not a single mistake I found to mention. Even the little bit touch of romance gives you ‘awww’ moments while reading his affectionate and warm acts. The writer has paid attention to every aspect of ruling a country in an efficient way. I am amazed to see how writer has written every character in depth. I didn’t feel any barrier to imagine them. Indeed, while reading the story, . I didn’t notice much flaws. The story format was also good. However, the ending is always leaving some questions behind. I guess, it is necessary to keep the reader on reading with focus. Once you dive a bit deep, you won’t be able to put it back. It is pretty much interesting to see the writing style. There is no doubt I can see improvement in the content. From Author’s perspective FIRST IMPRESSION - What was my overall take on the chapter after reading it? Answer- It was much better than the last time. The writing style was always engaging Once you make some further changes, it will all set to go. PACE AND FLOW - Was it too fast/slow? Does it move smoothly, or is it rough and choppy? Did I feel lost at all? Answer- It did felt rough at points but that’s all okay as it is all a part of writing journey. You make errors, you rewrite and there you go. A flawless content is ready for the reader. SENSITIVITY - Is there anything that offended you in any way? No, there isn’t such thing. In fact, I love the way how the author has written this beauty with only sweet affectionate romance and chemistry. The major focus was its story instead of romance and this is what I loved the most about it. DIALOGUE WRITING - Do you enjoy the narration of the author? Was the message delivered in a clear and thoughtful manner? Yes, I have enjoyed it to the core. The writer has clearly described every scene or emotion with right words. At a point, I noticed a little bit need of editing. You can add it if you want to. This is what creative writing is all about. The more you showcase the expressions, the more you beautify your work. PLOT/CONSISTENCY - Was the plot on point? Do I like where it is going? Answer- OH yes! This is something that you can’t put back on shelf once you start it. GRAMMAR/SYNTAX - Does the wording confuse me? Does the writing excite me, even though it doesn't entirely make sense at times? Answer-It didn’t confuse me at all.. It is just perfect.